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Sep. 23rd, 2011 06:33 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
thatyourefuseI'm working on my first full-length vid and I've just come hard up against a narrative issue.
I scrapped my first version of my first draft yesterday after a friend pointed out (correctly) that the POV was incredibly unclear and I was trying to get across too much information without actually explaining the significance or context of any of it. I've put together a new intro, which I think does establish my POV character much more clearly, but the problem is that now a significant amount of the information I want to convey is stuff that she's being deliberately shut off from for much of the duration, and I am hanging up badly on the question of how to include it without losing the thread.
(It doesn't exactly help that this is in a fandom literally next to no one has ever heard of, and which has a lot of plot. I don't know what came over me. I blame the song, and Hermione Norris.)
Does anyone have any ideas about how I can resolve this, or recs for vids that deal with similar POV issues?
This is my first version and this is the new intro, if anyone's interested.
Thank you so, so much.
(cross-posted to vidding @ lj, and I'm not sure how to tag this.)
I scrapped my first version of my first draft yesterday after a friend pointed out (correctly) that the POV was incredibly unclear and I was trying to get across too much information without actually explaining the significance or context of any of it. I've put together a new intro, which I think does establish my POV character much more clearly, but the problem is that now a significant amount of the information I want to convey is stuff that she's being deliberately shut off from for much of the duration, and I am hanging up badly on the question of how to include it without losing the thread.
(It doesn't exactly help that this is in a fandom literally next to no one has ever heard of, and which has a lot of plot. I don't know what came over me. I blame the song, and Hermione Norris.)
Does anyone have any ideas about how I can resolve this, or recs for vids that deal with similar POV issues?
This is my first version and this is the new intro, if anyone's interested.
Thank you so, so much.
(cross-posted to vidding @ lj, and I'm not sure how to tag this.)
